Welcome to the 2013 A to Z Challenge!
This year, I’m
focusing on two themes: Emotions and
grammar,
depending on which
letter we’re on each day.
Today’s a grammar day!
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V is for Verb: in language, a class of words that typically
express action, state, or a relation between two things, and that which may be
inflected for tense, aspect, voice, mood, and to show agreement with their
subject or object.
There are a dozen topics I could discuss in regards to the
almighty verb. Just look at this list of
verb types: Causative, copula, ditransitive, dynamnic, finite, inchoative,
intransitive, irregular, modal, non-finite, performative, phrasl, regular,
stative, and transitive.
I even hit on one type in my discussion of tense last
Tuesday, but I think I’ll keep this limited to the issues I see most often when
editing. Primarily—and, as writers,
we’ve all been warned against this—the biggest issue I see is the use of
passive verbs versus active ones.
First, allow me to show the difference.
- Active: I threw the ball. The subject (I) performs the action (threw) on the object (the ball)
- Passive: The ball was thrown by me. The subject (ball) receives the action (was thrown) instead of performing it and is typically aided by a helping verb (is, was, been, are, were.)
- Inert: The ball is round. The verb “is” describes a state of being and is neither active nor passive.
Now, allow me to say one more thing—passive verbs are not
necessarily wrong, but they do weaken the sentence. And a sentence with a passive voice uses far
more words than one with an active voice.
Compound this by every sentence in your manuscript, and you’ve got a lot
of space taken up by wasted words, space where you could explore plot and
character more deeply with active verbs.
There is another form of passive verb I see quite
often. And honestly, I use it
myself. Everyone does. For the most part, it’s not too egregious,
that is, if you don’t overuse it and if revising it to the more active form
changes the meaning or doesn’t quite fit.
I’m talking about the use of gerunds or –ing verbs.
Why say her shoulders
were shaking when her shoulders shook
will work? But if you say her life was unraveling at the seams, it
really doesn’t work to revise it to her
life unraveled at the seams, because you’re trying to show something
currently happening in the moment, not in the past, even though the story is
told in the past. Make sense? I know, it’s confusing, and that’s why so
many writers have a problem with it, including me.
14 comments:
Sometimes it's obviously better to use active, you can see it as soon as you change it. But sometimes it isn't very clear, and then I go on what sounds right, even if it might not be technically correct.
mood
Moody Writing
I am a dedicated user of gerunds, but I'm always certain as I write them that they are just right for the situation. Once in a while, they are.
I'm getting better about it. At first it's really difficult to see them in one's own work.
May I add that I really like the cartoon?
I try not to use them, but sometimes you have to. And glad to know the -ing ones are okay because I do use those.
I think it's like anything, passive verbs can be used on occasion but definitely need to keep them in check. In an action scene, you probably want, well, active verbs.
I know my Spellcheck likes to point out those passive phrases.
Ah, yes. Verbs. The spice of prose.
Verbs are SO important!
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After I read the title of your post, I couldn't help but think of the old School House Rock cartoon....
"Verb...that's what's happenin'!" Heh :)
Good points on passive verbs, as well and something to remember in my own works.
Verbs are great when used correctly.
I try to avoid passive verbs, unless someone is murdered or is kidnapped. Those two do work well, especially if the killer/kidnapper is unknown.
So many rules...so little time.
Heather
I do a search for "was" and try to weed out the many, many passive nouns I seem to inherently love.
A great V post. Where would all the action come from for our story without verbs? So then it's funny that adverbs get such a bad wrap. :-)
V = Veracious Verisimilitude
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